Winning The Dream Suite
This summer me my best friend hayley my mom and me won the dream suite. It was the most fun thing in the entire world. My favorite part was when we actually won!
I and Haley were on the Grizzly River Rapids ride (my mom didn’t want to get wet). We went on it about four times, we loved that ride. Our favorite part was going down the waterfall! Then the last time that my mom would let us go on the ride something amazing happened when we got of……….the dream team was staring at us. Me and hayley didn’t know why they were looking so we said hi and kept walking. But then they followed us, asked where my mom was, and told us that there was a surprise waiting for us. After we found my mom, in the crowd of people that were staring at us wondering why we were walking around with Disney people.J They took us to this office in backstage part of California adventure.
“So, I know you’ve been wondering why we brought u here. YOU’VE WON A NIGHT IN THE DISNEY DREAM SUIT” That’s the main party that I remember of itJ it was out of pure luck, I won it because of the seat in was sitting in on the ride!
on November 13th, 2008 at 2:47 pm
This story has a lot of potential. I’m assuming that this isn’t your final yet because there are a couple of mistakes. But forgetting about these mistakes, this story is pretty good. It sounds like it was a big suprise, but I wish that you would describe it more. But all in all this is a fairly well written story and it has a lot of potential to be great.